Kevin McAdam
AP English 11/ Mr. George
10/1/09
Rewritten proposal
Mr. Collins’ Proposal
My dear Miss Elizabeth, pardon my intrusion in my calling you today, but nonetheless I assure you that I would not disturb you if it was not of the utmost importance. I had once believed that I would never find a lovely wife that I truly loved until I met you. I realize that I am not the most irresistible man, but any moment I spend with you I feel like the luckiest man in the world. My flaws are probably more than the next man’s, but I know that I have the determination to make it work between us. You have known me for some time now, and you know that I am a very passionate yet modest man with a heart as big as a lion.
Your exceptionally astounding features, both physically and intellectually, make any man believe that he is not worthy to be in your presence, but I know there is no way I could ever be without you. No one can ever take away your unique personality which makes being around you every second of every day so special. Whenever I feel blue, I think of you and everything feels magnificent. Having you in my life all the time will make me happier than anything else in the world.
I know now that you may be nervous and thinking that we are not right for each other, and to be quite honest, I am nervous too. However, I must swear to you that no one could love more than I will. Your stunning looks your superior elegance your inspiring class your unmistakable charm your unique sense of humor your firm beliefs your unbending loyalty your uplifting spirit have all touched me and have given me the strength to approach you in this situation and ask you the supreme question being… Will you marry me?